mind over matter

This is a short review for a short poem lol, but there's not much to review.

What little is there, however, is exceptional. I think the thing to note, primarily, is the formal nature of the poem - rather, the lack thereof. Brilliantly done! As is common, it's a poem about longing and yearning and hurting, but it's written so well!

I haven't much else to say, and if you've read my reviews, Lavvie, you'd know that's really very rare. Loved it!

I recommend submitting it to The Ranger Magazine - a home for experimental poetry like this.

Hello Lavvie, first of all, thank you for welcoming me into YWS
Second, you wrote beautifully, and although I didn't fully understand the meaning, I will do my best to review it.
I really liked the first stanza a lot because it provides a detailed experience of how you feel about someone you love dearly being lost/ sick.
If you are experiencing this in real life, then I am very sorry to hear that. Nobody deserves to experience such a thing.
But othrwise, I personally feel that this is a great poem and there is nothing to be improved. I wish that I could write this beautifully like you!

this is beautiful!

Love this!