Hi! This was a really interesting and thought-provoking read. For starters, I love the idea of this poem. My interpretation (which may be totally wrong) is of the extremity of jealousy, the yearning of wishing you could be someone else, and the difficulty of not knowing who exactly you are. This is a really relatable and common experience, and I love that you chose to write about it and help others feel less alone in their emotions. This poem has super interesting imagery. I especially love the last line, as it reminds me of the idea that I see super often on social media where people say stuff like 'the cage door is wide open, yet he's not leaving'. Nothing was physically keeping you there, yet you stayed, no matter how harmful it was. I love the language you used, such as when you said 'come a'rustlin' and 'hold-emups and shoot-em-outs.' I thought these added an interesting flair to the poem that reminded me of some western movie. The use of italics was really nice too, since it differentiated important parts from the rest of the poem. This was a really nice and sophisticated poem! Thanks for sharing!
Hello I'm new here so I'm still figuring thing's out, but thought I'd try to do a review on your work, please keep in mind that this review might not be that helpful to you, sorry ahead of time if it isn't.
So I read the first line and it seems like this person is confused about who they are and there not sure about there surroundings. I'm captivated by the obvious emotion behind this peace, and the hard work that you put into it. What I will say is in the very first line where you say to be a you. I feel like that a messed up the flow a bit, and it might be a little better if you took that one letter out. That's just my opinion, the rest was amazing, and truly intriguing to read, I can tell that you take you're writing seriously, so I hope that I will be able to read more soon.
Post Info
Points:
Time spent:
Canary word: Present
Possible AI signals:
Original Text:
Delete Comment
Are you sure you want to delete this comment? This cannot be undone.
Mark as Review
Mark this comment as a review? Points will be awarded to the poster.
Edit Comment
Review counted!
Posted as a comment
Your comment was posted, but it wasn’t long enough to count as a review. Reviews need about four complete sentences (at least 250 characters). Try writing another review that explains your thoughts in more detail — the author will appreciate it, and you’ll earn points for it.
Hi! This was a really interesting and thought-provoking read.
For starters, I love the idea of this poem. My interpretation (which may be totally wrong) is of the extremity of jealousy, the yearning of wishing you could be someone else, and the difficulty of not knowing who exactly you are. This is a really relatable and common experience, and I love that you chose to write about it and help others feel less alone in their emotions.
This poem has super interesting imagery. I especially love the last line, as it reminds me of the idea that I see super often on social media where people say stuff like 'the cage door is wide open, yet he's not leaving'. Nothing was physically keeping you there, yet you stayed, no matter how harmful it was.
I love the language you used, such as when you said 'come a'rustlin' and 'hold-emups and shoot-em-outs.' I thought these added an interesting flair to the poem that reminded me of some western movie.
The use of italics was really nice too, since it differentiated important parts from the rest of the poem.
This was a really nice and sophisticated poem! Thanks for sharing!
Hello I'm new here so I'm still figuring thing's out, but thought I'd try to do a review on your work, please keep in mind that this review might not be that helpful to you, sorry ahead of time if it isn't.
So I read the first line and it seems like this person is confused about who they are and there not sure about there surroundings.
I'm captivated by the obvious emotion behind this peace, and the hard work that you put into it.
What I will say is in the very first line where you say to be a you. I feel like that a messed up the flow a bit, and it might be a little better if you took that one letter out.
That's just my opinion, the rest was amazing, and truly intriguing to read, I can tell that you take you're writing seriously, so I hope that I will be able to read more soon.