Published November 29, 2023
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Wow the shape of this poem is very interesting. Your use of imagery and vocabulary is really cool. My favorite lines are probably "kissing lips like tongue twisters, kissing wounds/created by swords of time, healing through time." the transition between those lines are what get me, and descriptions too. Even though there are some typos, nothing major just some small things here and there, I am able to read it without any problems and I think this is a really solid poem.
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I just want to review this!
This is a wonderful narrative of how someone thinks of theirself while they're growing up. It's an amazing way to picture somebody imaging themselves as an older, responsible person while looking for something to fill an empty void of emotion. This is a wonderful metaphor of feeling, and it has beautiful wording too. The quote "I no longer feel bound by tradition" is a wonderful way to picture someone who is growing up.
Well, my review is over, hope you do well in the future, bye!