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Senior and Freshman duo

by L0ca1Tes1a


Warning: This work has been rated 16+ for language and mature content.

I've always heard about the senior & freshman duo. I've always thought it was sweet. I never thought I would make it to high school to experience it. Then I did. Once I realized I was going to make it, I started wondering what the senior would be like. I never would have imagined they would have been like you. but after meeting you i'd never trade it for the world. You told me about yourself, and how at one point you were in a similar place as me. In more than one way. You also told me that a senior had to leave you too. You said that you never thought a freshman would talk and be friends with you, 'cause you were a dickhead. At first I wasn't going to talk to you but then you talked to me and I got to know you and I got comfortable. So far I am the only one who talks to you, at least the only one you actually like. Becoming this duo with you didn't just give me a friend, or mentor it gave me a brother. And one day it'll be my turn to be the senior.

*optional to read.* This is a poem I wrote to my best friend who I consider my brother. yes he was a senior and I'm a freshman. he's graduated and said he'll always talk to me not matter what. You changed my life for a better, if it wasn't for you I would have never talked to anyone on the wrestling team. I would have still been one of the two girls there who rarely talked. You made me comfortable to be there and made me feel accepted. You were the first to talk to me on the team, and you were also the first one in or duo to get comfortable and open up. you said you viewed me as a younger sister and that made me very happy. you were ready to fight the person who sa'd me when I told you about them. you were ready to fight anyone who hurt or was being mean to me. no matter how old he was or what exactly he did, even if you didn't know them you were going to fight them. you let me give you the nickname buttercup even though you thought it was kind of goofy and somewhat feminine, but you still let me call you it, and you find it sweet. you were the first person to tell me your proud of me and have me actually believe it. I gave him a copy of the poem and he said he cried while reading it and was going to keep it forever and take it to college. I cant wait to meet your kids one day. I love you very much buttercup, and thank you.


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Nice work done by the author.

I am really happy for the author. The title may look like she had a different relation with her senior but in reality he was just her best friend.
I am happy that she could find someone she trusts on, someone who shares the same thoughts as her, someone who is always present there for her whenever she feels lonely and someone who is ready to fight for her, protecting her just like a 'brother' protects his sister.

And I really like how 'the importance of friendship' is explained in this poem (letter), because these days if you are someone's friend most of the people think it otherwise.

Keep it up.
Waiting for more.
Thank you.




L0ca1Tes1a says...


Thank you! I realize the title looks deceiving but it was the only one I could think of. I also like the way you saw the importance of friendship in the letter.



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Hey friend, Ellie here (again) to review one of your poetry pieces! I was a bit surprised when I saw the formatting of this piece, since I was expecting it to be written in verse, but overall this was a very sweet letter. It sounds like this friend of yours is a very sweet person and has been a wonderful friend to you! Let me give you some feedback on the formatting and interpretation of the letter, starting right at the beginning.

I've always heard about the senior & freshman duo. I've always thought it was sweet. I never thought I would make it to high school to experience it.


You mention 'not thinking you'd make it to high school' in this letter, multiple times. I think it could really benefit the emotional aspect of this if you expanded on that idea a little bit more instead of brushing over it. It is a very bold statement and there is so much behind that- why did you think that? how did this friend help you overcome those feelings? Id love more of that :D

Once I realized I was going to make it, I started wondering what the senior would be like.


I think you mean 'seniors' instead of just a singular senior here!

'cause you were a dickhead.


you begin a quote here, but you never close it.

Becoming this duo with you didn't just give me a friend, or mentor it gave me a brother. And one day it'll be my turn to be the senior.


this is a very short and sweet letter, but this last part really carries it home. it sums up a lot of the feeling you have and I thought it was a very lovely ending :) if you wanted to make this letter longer, I would love to hear you mention some of the qualities of this friend that you admire. maybe the first time you met. how it felt when they had to leave, things like that!

Thanks for posting this sweet tribute to your friend! I really liked it :3 hope you write more!!

Your friend,
Ellie




L0ca1Tes1a says...


Thank you this review too! I didn't format it as verses because it was originally just a letter to my friend in the form of somewhat a poem. thats also why I didn't expand on the details of why I thought I wouldn't make it, but since I gave him his own copy and am posting it here I guess I might as well add some details. I did purposely but senior as singular instead of plural because I was refering to the senior in the duo. I did not realize I forgot to end the quote. Thank you for helping me understand what I can add will definitely think of adding some more.



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L0ca1Tes1a~
When I looked at the title and the description I thought it was going to be a little different. I understand that having friendships with an age gap is strange, but when it's a sibling relationship it gets less weird. I'm still not completely sure what kind of relationship this was, but maybe it was about your friend who you considered a brother. Overall I think this post was very personal in a good way, sharing your thoughts and experiences. Great job!
AmberMelanie




L0ca1Tes1a says...


Thank you! i can see how the title might of let you think it was something else. yes it is about how me and my friend both view each other as siblings.




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