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Dear younger brother

by L0ca1Tes1a


I'm sorry. I'm sorry I couldn't help you. I'm sorry loses its meaning after a while, but I really do mean it. I don't know where you are, but I hope you're doing well or at least are doing okay. I didn't hate you, and you're not a bad person. you just had your own set of issues. I'm sorry. I'm sorry you believed what she told you. I don't know exactly what she told you but I know it made him seem like the bad guy. it wasn't true. he wanted to help you, but you wouldn't believe it. We had some good memories, and we had some bad. But no matter what, you were still my brother. But we don't talk anymore. I'm sorry. I'm sorry you wouldn't trust him. I think about you sometimes. So I just wanted to say sorry. I'm sorry younger brother. Maybe one day we'll talk again but until then, I'm sorry.


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Hey friend!! Ellie here once again with another review :D Lets get right into it!

I'm sorry. I'm sorry I couldn't help you. I'm sorry loses its meaning after a while, but I really do mean it.


This is a really beautiful way to begin this poetic letter. I love the repetition of 'I'm sorry' and the fact that you even comment on that repetition. words seem to lose meanings when they are said so many times. you must have said this a lot, but still mean it. that shows a lot of regret and pain for things that have happened in the past. I am intrigued to know more!

you just had your own set of issues. I'm sorry.


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it wasn't true. he wanted to help you, but you wouldn't believe it.


these is the only lines that begins without a capital letter, so maybe it was a typo to not have You, It, and He.

I'm sorry. I'm sorry you wouldn't trust him. I think about you sometimes. So I just wanted to say sorry. I'm sorry younger brother. Maybe one day we'll talk again but until then, I'm sorry.


I really enjoyed this ending. it is full of emotion. It really makes me want to know more. It is interesting to hear that this is a younger brother. I assumed he would be a polder brother who ran away or doesn't live with the family. Overall, this is a very sweet letter to your brother. It is filled with emotion and I really hope that you guys can talk soon.

Your friend,
Ellie

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L0ca1Tes1a says...


Thank you! I am glad you liked how I started the letter/poem. Yes the non capital letters are very much a typo. I am also glad you like how it ended. Yes it seems like it would go to an older brother who ran away or doesn't live with the family anymore, but it goes to a younger brother, a younger brother who no longer visits my family.



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Wow. There are several things I like about this short, but still quite emotional piece. I like it when one motif tends to repeat itself through the works - here it is, for example, in the form of a recurring apology. I like that things are not explained in this text. The whole work reminds me a bit of a letter written to someone close to whom you don't have to explain what you're talking about or what you're apologizing for. These few dozens of sentences really left a person with emotions and maybe even unanswered questions - who is the brother and what happened? I like that we don't have an answer to them. And so it should be, because this poem is really something...personal? I think that's a good term. I could be wrong, but I'm assuming this job is really for your brother, and while I don't know your story or his, I hope you are both okay!




L0ca1Tes1a says...


Thank you! yes it is a personal poem and is for my brother. I'm glad you liked it and liked how your're still left with questions.




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