A pen holds power.
It's more dangerous than a sword, a gun, or a knife.
A pen can destroy your life, tell a lie, ruin you, kill you, but it can also build your life, tell a truth, help you, bring you to life.
A pen can spread a rumor, start a war, burn a country, end a life, forget a life, but it can also end a rumor, end a war, start a country, save a life, memorialize a life.
A pen can help you understand others, understand yourself, share your thoughts, explore your demons, say what you can not say.
A pen is dangerous because of the words it puts on the paper, but what's more dangerous?
The pen that writes the words?
Or the person who holds the pen and creates the words?
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This is an exceptionally powerful and thought-provoking poem that explores the profound influence of words and the tools used to create them. The way you present the idea of the pen as a source of power is compelling and makes the reader pause to consider its significance. I’m not entirely sure if this was your intended message, but the last three lines—
"A pen is dangerous because of the words it puts on the paper, but what's more dangerous?
The pen that writes the words?
Or the person who holds the pen and creates the words?" —
evoked for me the ongoing debates surrounding the nature of certain weapons. This made me reflect on the classic question: Is it the object itself that holds the power, or is it the person using it? While the pen and a weapon are, of course, very different, I found the parallel interesting. The pen in your poem seems almost like a neutral, omnipotent force—a silent deity, if you will—that has immense control over human actions. It’s fascinating to think of it in this way, as something that is passive yet holds great potential, capable of influencing or even controlling entire lives.
This idea led me to consider how many pens have signed life-altering contracts, written declarations of war, or created entire worlds of fiction. Your poem drew attention to this in a way I hadn’t fully appreciated before.
If I were to offer a suggestion, it would be maybe use more imagery in your poem. Maybe in the middle instead of saying what it could do, maybe illustrate it? To be honest I think this is a great poem, and your writing style is easy to follow, so just keep doing you. Hope to see more of your writing later!
Hi names 22Midnight
hope your doing well, let's get into it!
First Impression: Normally I just talk about the title when I say first impressions so when I read the name of your poem in the green room I really thought this this was going to be about like royals or governments or someone that holds a lot of power because of the position that there in currently.
This was definitely not what I was expecting to read, it's been very well written and it really captures the meaning behind what it really means to be a writer who can just write anything they want even if its not nice or just create there own world and destroy it to build it up again.
I'd like to make one suggestion to this though I feel like the word pen is repeated a little more then it has to be, maybe lesson it to make it every third or second line that it's said instead of almost every single line, just so it doesn't become to repetitive, you also could use pencil in some lines instead of pen so slightly change the wording.
hope this makes sense
Overall: It was wonderfully written and was very straight forward in its meaning, I also liked that the poem didn't drag out, it was as short and long as it had to be, had a lovely meaning as well
anyway that's it from me
hope you have a great dawn/dusk/midnight
See Ya
Thank you! I'm glad you like the poem as well as the meaning.
I absolutely love the thoughts you shared in this poem! It reminded me of how when you drop a brick and a small stone, they will still fall at the same rate, despite one being a lot bigger. A pen is a small and simple, but it can defeat and cause more damage than a weapon. I loved how you go through the bad things a pen can do, but then you shift to these incredible good deeds that it can accomplish as well. For example:
The 'memorialize a life' statement really stood out to me. Because there aren't a lot of good things weapons can do, besides protect from harm, although they cause a lot more violence. This is actually a beautiful idea to think about. We can all feel so powerless, but you promote these ideas that we are strong! Writers are strong because we have the pens, we have the words and the desire to write change and seek a better future. I love that <33
I have seen so much growth in your writing.
I love how you finish with questions. My only comment would be that this final 'or' was not capitalized, while the rest of your sentences in the lines started with capitals.
Overall, lovely poem!! <33 Keep writing!
Your friend,
Ellie
Thank you! I'm glad you liked this poem I had a lot of fun writing it and actually changed it from the original I wrote in my journal. I'm glad you see improvement in my writing, I guess it helped taking a two month break while I regained my motivation again.