Tired of This

Hey there! It's ZeldaIsShiek here to review another quintessential piece of literature that made my day and win this Review Day by helping the Red Pandas stay in first place and reaching my goal of 80 reviews. I might even get to 100, if I work hard enough. I am really excited to review this amazing piece of art that you have created, and maybe add some witty humor as well. Anyway, that's enough idle chatter from me. Let's get into the review.

The first thing I liked about this poem was how it was short and sweet but still delivered a meaningful message to the reader in an enjoyable fashion. The way you have the phrase "I am tired of this" floating at the end of each sentence feels like the end of a passive sentence. By that I mean it feels like the three lines that came before it were all leading up to this one line that is the subject of the poem. The sentence "The ball was kicked to win the game by Roy," is in passive because the description of what was happening came before who did it. The sentence "Roy kicked the ball to win the game," sounds plain, right? Like the surprise was wasted on the first word of the sentence instead of building suspense until the reader finds out who it was that kicked the ball. Your poem is like a passive sentence; it is amazingly written.

I also enjoyed the first few lines because they are very relatable. I wish people would just trust that I know what I am doing and that I am not making a mistake, but everyone is so nosy because I am 14 that they think they have to helicopter everything I do because they think they can't trust me.

That's all for today. Keep writing amazing literature that inspires me to read and review them, and have a great Review Day! Let's beat the Blues once and for all!

~ZeldaIsShiek

Helloo!! Great day.


Your poem is absolutely beautiful! The message is wonderful. As mentioned before, the way you used repetition in your poem emphasized the meaning and significance of your work. It made me look back on the things and choices I've done and taken to heal the scars inside my heart.

Let's face it. We all get tired once in a while, yet we must still try to observe the optimistic side of things.

I loved the way you executed and expressed every emotion. Good job!!

Wow! Excellent use of repetition in order to increase the drama! As I read I felt the desperation involved in such a relationship or situation where one seems to be misunderstood when there is obviously no good reason for the misunderstanding. The details of the situation, such as what exactly is the obvious that should be understood, or what are the things that the writer wants t do that will make him or her happy, the cause for the worry and the fear, are not provided.

But the poem's purpose is to convey the emotion of frustration, the sense of futility and the hope that it will stop in some way. So exact details aren't necessary in order to get that across. However, exact details can prove useful for a longer version if you decide to make one.
Such a version would strive to convince the reader of the moral justification for the speaker to feel this way. But as it stands in reference to its purpose, it is complete in itself. The lack of punctuation I understood as a stylistic choice. Thanks for sharing and keep up the good work.