And here I am again to review your work!
Well, the poem is very nice, and it has a powerful message that you have conveyed to the readers rather easily, that too with very simple words. There aren't many nits to pick in this gorgeous little poem.
I didn't get it... has the narrator WISHED for their friend to cross the line? What sort of a friend would do that?
"I tried to pull you across" as in what? That the narrator's friend had already crossed the line, and the narrator tried to pull him back? That sort of dampens the power of the poem.
Well, that's it. You know, I would love to read out this poem to my friend who just ditched me. But I won't. It wouldn't be right. Anyway, congratulations on being such a good poet!
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