Young Writers Society

Hey there! It's ZeldaIsShiek here to review another quintessential piece of literature that made my day and win this Review Day by helping the Red Pandas stay in first place and reaching my goal of 80 reviews. I might even get to 100, if I work hard enough. I am really excited to review this amazing piece of art that you have created, and maybe add some witty humor as well. Anyway, that's enough idle chatter from me. Let's get into the review.

I believe that this poem is about a friendship with someone who you liked more than a friend. They were ambitious, fired up, strong and powerful. They are a very inspirational person who you look up to as a legend or an idol, and they are very important to you. However, they are also a bad influence on you, but they are also kind and thoughtful. When I get too into something, it is hard for me to see if I hurt others. In this way the character and I are similar. I also felt that you write poems to express how you feel about this person instead of telling them, because it would probably hurt them emotionally.

The line "You may go to far" should be "You may go too far" because 'too' goes in:
There were too many choices; I couldn't choose.
and the word 'to' goes in:
We went to the mall this weekend.

Overall, this poem was very well written and I can't wait to review more from you soon.

That's all for today. Keep writing amazing literature that inspires me to read and review them, and have a great Review Day! Let's beat the Blues once and for all!

~ZeldaIsShiek

Hello Junel! Kara here for a (hopefully) quick review!

Give me your soul.

With that aside, I'm not the best at poetry but here we go!

Bold = grammar and flow issues.
Italics = suggestions and overall
Strikethrough = remove
Underline = krazy Kara komments.

My interpretation:

Overall:

This review courtesy of

Hullo Junel! Cat here to review this lovely poem! Okay then, here we go!

First, let's go through your poem together:

This is- amazing.

Not only is it relatable but it leaves you with a feel as if we’re are you ourselves.
I like how it has a pensive sadness to it, I feel heartbroken for you.

You mention that ‘I am a different person with it’. It gets me thinking that you change your self for this person because you don’t like how you are without them. Perhaps they are someone you rely on and seek them out.

First, thanks for sharing this very interesting poem. I admit that the poem is sincere and transmits the intended mood of the reader's unqualified devotion. But I am left wondering why such a devotion is given. After all, the person is described as feeling offended by it. How does a person who cannot be spoken to because our speaking of our devotion would cause unhappiness deserve that devotion? So as a reader I am forced to assume that the person doesn't deserve the speaker's devotion and that the speaker is infatuated or obsessed.