Warning: This work has been rated 16+ for language.
I just wanna live
In an 80s movie
Somewhere I can give
And it would be groovy
~
Maybe I could kick some butt
And win the All-Valley
Bonsai I could cut
Or kill that girl Ali
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There could be Russian invaders
Victory screams WOLVERIENES
We'll lose some of our own
If that means winning, by all means
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I want to fall in love
With a farm boy
See a man with a six fingered glove
And then after all we'll jump for joy
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Is that an alien
Out in the wood?
Its defiantly not mammalian
Is it evil or is it good?
~
Key to faking out parents; clammy hands
I'm a big believer in it
Cameron goes bezerk; Camera pans
I do have a test today that wasn't bullshit
~
Now I'm a Greaser or a hood
"I'm lousy," is all I've been told
I'm told, "I'm no good."
But I can say, "Stay Gold."
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'Ello!
I wanted to review this because I love 80s movies and I want to see if I can figure out the movies that the references belong to. Second and last are probably the easiest to figure out, so I'll skip over those ones.
The Princess Bride? It was released in 1987 if I'm remembering correctly (might be a bit wrong haha), so it works there. :eyes:
Ah yes, words of wisdom from Ferris Bueller.
Red Dawn??? :eyes:
Now, the first rhyme sounds good; it doesn't seem that forced and the words work well together, but the other rhyme is a bit quick and easy. It feels like an afterthought kind of, which I doubt it was.
A lot of the rhymes here suffer from that. There are some really solid ones, and that is wonderful, but there are also some ones that don't work well or just don't sound like they flow together nicely.
I love rhyming poetry, and I love the topic you chose. Just go here if you possibly need help with anything relating to rhymes.
Good job!
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Hi!
First off I really enjoyed this poem especially because I totally got most of the references. It's a very interesting idea for a poem, and it makes me wonder why you decided to write it. I really enjoyed the last line: "But I can say, 'stay gold.'"
Hi. To keep you from wondering, I wrote this because I absolutely love 80s movies. I realized i could make a literary work about some of my favourites.
Hey I guess I’m here to review. Haven’t done it in awhile, so here we go
I don’t know much about the 80s or anything, but I mean the 80s references seemed accurate. I know everyone on this site says “I really liked this poem” but I really liked this poem. It wasn’t all deep and poetic but rather straightforward and it’s nice to see that in poetry sometimes. The rhyming for the most part flowed good and I’m sure this is nostalgic for someone out there
The only critique I have is that the line “I do have a test today that wasn’t bullshit” doesn’t flow in that stanza. I think it’s too long or something? Maybe shorten it and it will flow better or find something else to rhyme with “it”. It’s your choice, whatever you want to do
Anyway that’s it, I hope this helped maybe ?? I don’t know, just. Good poem