If you ask a question
no matter how hard it may be,
no matter how stupid,
or crazy it might seem
I will answer
~~~
If you come to me
with any inquiry
to the best of my ability
I will set your mind free.
I will answer
~~~
I might not have
the information on hand.
I will search out a solution
to the question you had planned.
I will answer
~~~
But if you continue
to treat me like
this all-knowing being,
you'd be looking for a fight
I might answer
~~~
I'd like to give answers
for cold hard questions.
If it's not that
my interest lessens.
I could answer
~~~
It all ends when you.
Can't use your brain.
For a simple task.
Then you make me insane.
I won't answer
~~~
But fellow if you come to me
with a lowly question
with a humble stance
and a curious expression...
I will surley answer
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This is just one of those poems which takes your daily life and gives it to you in words. I love how you change this line :
'I will answer'
'I might answer'
'I could answer'
'I won't answer'
'I will surly answer' (Oh, and I think you meant 'surely' there, as surly sort of changes the meaning)
My favourite part of the entire piece is 'you'd be looking for a fight, I might answer.'
My only critiques are based on your word choice. Instead of 'cold hard questions', you could use something like 'solid questions'. And you might also consider changing 'with a lowly question'
Keep Writing!
Hello! My name is Via and I'm here for a review. So... let's get started!
POSITIVES:
First and foremost, I love the theme of this poem. The mood and ideals of asking questions and getting the answers is just top notch. I love poetry that makes us think! Your poem makes the readers, including myself, really think about things. The poem is relatable, which is so good. That takes talent and skill. So good job on that!
Your utilization of repetition is top notch. The use of the word "answer" and the changes of the line that repeats it, is just lovely. Your rhyme scheme as well for the most part is consistent. While I'm all for inconsistencies in rhyming, here the structure is useful and necessary. Then you kept a constant five line per stanza, which I loved. It added a more built aspect that I liked.
Your choice diction is good as well. I like how you didn't use intricate vocabulary because it makes the poem more straight forward, which for a theme like this is needed.
Your poem's mood and theme is well addressed and thought out. It's very clear and concise, to the point, which is good. The simplistic quality adds depth and makes the poem and easy and relatable read.
Overall, your lines flow well, which is impressive for someone so young. Often times rhythm is something many poets in general, including myself, especially young poets struggle with. You have used it masterfully here. Great job! You should be very proud.
My favorite line in particular is
CRITIQUES:
Most of my critiques are just minor fixes or common for young poets. Just take them with a grain of salt, they're only suggestions.
First of all, auto capitalization is the bane of all poets, even myself. Lines that are a part of same sentence don't need to all be capitalized. Fixing that will make the poem better grammatically.
Like what @MapleWay suggested, punctuation will enhance the flow of the poem and set a better tone. Some poets forgo punctuation to add layers, but here commas and periods will add emphasis to your poem and help the flow go better.
Your poem's small images aren't as well developed as they could be. While I loved the narration aspect of your poem, a metaphor or well developed image or two could be a nice addition. Just be careful not to overcrowd the poem and keep the structure consistent.
Overall, great poem! I enjoyed reading it. You're very talented! Keep writing!
Hello! This is the first time I'm writing a review!
I love your poem. The repetition of "I will answer" and changing of the "will" in the sentence for different situations, I love it. And the rhyming is also nice. Overall, it's a good poem about a guy who answers everyone who comes for him with a question.
Hi, hello, greetings, salutations, good morning, good afternoon, good evening, and good night as well as many other pleasant things that I do not have time for as I am here to review this for you! Anyway, Wolf here.
This is a very well written poem. Your use of rhyme and imagery is very well thought out.
the rhythm is even, and the lines flow well. The poem also speaks to me personally as well as brings to mind several characters I know of.
Good work, and keep writing I look forward to reading more of your work in the future.
Hey there! MapleWay here dropping by with a review! (And thanks for the tag!)
This was a great poem! I really enjoyed the repetition you used as well! It added so much to the poem as a whole! And the way you began running through certain circumstances, in the end, was perfect! There is really only one thing I would recommend doing. Using punctuation to set a tone. You totally don't have to do this but I think it would add a lot if you added it in order to create pauses and make a more distinct tone. And once again feel free to ignore this! It's just a suggestion!
Anyways once again great poem! Thanks for tagging me!
- MapleWay
Yeah np Maple!
@MapleWay