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Oooh…cool poem about losing sanity,but then again,the narrator probably never had any.I love how you changed the punctuation of the poem to emphasize the narrator’s perspective on sanity.Is the narrator talking to a therapist or to themselves? I guess that’s for you to know and me to find out.Imagine that this is all in the narrator’s mind…Anyway,great poem! I hope you have a lovely day/night!

I like the way you tried giving an overview description of your insanity and thats realkt nice of you, but just like other poems and including I, no one is perfect and so there are definitely some few things I hold against your poem and that's why it's a review.
Firstly, the poem is nice but I think the mood and tone of the poem has no ecstasy and that's very bad because I think the poem is insane and the poet was as well in an insane mood. NO OFFENSE. Maybe thats how the poem was actually meant to be written and that's not all of it because the structure of the poem is not nice and I can't start typing your errors. One thing I have observed as a poet is that the way you write,arrange and spell words are as important as the diction, style and language you try to choose.
If you would go with me, I think you need to walk on your spellings and alphabetical letterings as they do not appear nice. Maybe that's one's your choice but again, every poem should be able to reflect its true and original content.
Please don't get me wrong, I'm not trying to discriminate against your work, no I'm not but you would follow up with what have said, you would do a lot more better.
Anyways, the poem is nice and it's benevolency reflects on the poem.

Hey! I guess I’ll review this.

I think I actually can relate to this. It kinda of reminds me of intrusive thoughts, but also following up on those intrusive thoughts? Or maybe just having them—violent ones, where the world around you is like a piece of paper, ripe for the shredding.

You portrayed these ideas in a really cool way. I love the decomposing lettering and sentences to match the degradation of the narrator’s vision of their sanity. At first, the sentences have capital letters and punctuation, but by the end the poem the letters are scrambled and barely comprehensible. It’s definitely a fitting format for the subject of this poem.

Speaking of the subject, I won’t say everyone will relate to it. But the way you portray it here helps the readers understand. Slowly, the narrator is distorted into a monster-shaped thing as the writing and language is distorted. The last line kind of binds it all together—it brings us back the distortion to remind us this narrator is human, too, and trying to understand their sometimes strange actions and thinking. That last line anchors the poem, and I think that it completes the poem nicely.

Overall—I like this piece, I actually relate to it, and the format you’ve written it in really conveys the subject matter to the reader effectively. Criticisms? I don’t know if I have any. Read this as you will, and send me a DM if you wanna chat about any of this. (It kinda seems like this is about you, that’s why I ask. Like I said, I think I might be able to relate on a certain level. ?)

Hello!! Here for a review!!! I guess it's the first work of yours I am reviewing!

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Hi FireEyes,

Mailice here with a short review!

This is a great, creepy and eerie poem. It really gave me that feeling of being with a psychopath in many passages. If that was the effect, it was completely successful.

Everything I say is incoherent or downright incomprehensible
Weird obsessions and crazy people fill my mind

watching my sister as she slept quietly in the morning
keeping an eye on everyone, and I mean everyone