In Stillness

Ah! You are going for something!
The first stanza is almost completely solid. I don't understand how something can be broken into crumbs and yet have a united surface + stony crust, but crumbs is a perfect word to evoke the texture of dried paint, and canvas and brush are already so textured you open us with a waterfall of feelings, which is really engaging.

But the beginning of the second stanza is so weak! Especially when you've ended the first stanza with this image of stillness that seem so definite. Like, to me, that says "he doesn't move his hands anymore", and then we're asking, "or does he...!?!?!" haha. The second sentence doesn't even make sense. I can't follow it. What did you mean?
And though I like the rhyme and that this man is sitting and smiling in darkness, and I know it without seeing it, I don't like what it rhymes with because again, it doesn't seem to connect to anything else in the poem. I'd rather see you connect the stillness at the end of the first stanza directly with the darkness, maybe outline a chair to build the room and walls in our imaginations, and then give us the not-smile. What do you think?

PM me if you have questions or comments as I don't receive notifications of replies to my reviews. I'd be happy to talk this out with you, though, if you're interested.

In any case, good luck, push on, and keep writing!

What makes poetry unique is what you say, not how you say it. It doesn't really matter whose reading you poem as long as they understand the format of your words and the in depth meaning your trying to get across to the reader. The important thing about poetry is when you can be concise, but make a strong impact on the reader. So he/she can think of the meaning in all sorts of unique and in depth ways.

Work on the last stanza!

Love it!

Hello!

This poem's second stanza was a bit confusing to me, but the general meaning got across, so that was alright. It's always okay to leave a little bit of room for the reader to wonder, as long as it's not too much. Some specific things I noticed:

"The canvas of calm stands undisturbed.
No one picks the brush up.
The color has dried to crumbs"

My favorite part, I think. This is really beautiful.

"it's surface a stony crust."

'It's' should be 'its' in this situation...watch out!

"into shadows where
they find comfort"

The flow would be a lot better if you moved the 'where' at the end of the first line to the beginning of the second line instead.

"The dark won't let you see
which light illuminates those
masterpieces you'll never know of."

I think this was the specific part of the second stanza that was confusing. I guess I just don't get this sentence.

This was a great poem! I would love to see more where it came from!

Blue

This poem is really good even though I think it should have some rhymes.