I adore this poem. It intrigues me greatly because one of the things i look so desperately for in a good piece of writing is where the poem is personal to the writer but can be read into so it is also personal to the reader - and this is perfect because it can be interpreted in so many different ways;
mental illness, fake friends, a broken family etc,
I love the use of almost paradoxes - 'the ghouls will keep me safe' and 'the sirens will sing to me' the reason i love this so much is simply because something universally known as bad and scary are the things you have as a safety blanket. But i have to admit my favourite line of this poem and also probably the best line i've heard a long while is
' I wait with them,
and try not
to become them.'
This is such a well thought out line and even though it is only 10 words it pack a hell of a punch. It leaves you with a lot of questions and certainly not in a bad way - such as who are they? why is it almost a battle not to become them? and why do you feel this way about them?
All questions that i like not being answered because like i mentioned earlier is leaves room for interpretation.
The only bad thing i could come up with was that i'm not really a fan of how you sometimes put two run on sentences consecutively, why not just make one a longer sentence or place a comma in there?
But really such a tiny thing like that doesn't stand a chance to being the main focus when it comes to how extraordinary this poem is.
i normally sign off reviews with ' keep up the writing' but for my sake at least, KEEP UP THE WRITING!!!!!
i can't wait to see what else you have/are writing
from cara x
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