Young Writers Society

Thewriter13 here to give a quick review. *hey 80s buddy*
What can I say about this piece?
A LOT. Because it is so good and well written and well thought out.
I didn't expect the ending and I felt sad for the speaker but I also laughed at the irony of how the speaker's friend was misleading him.
Anyway I think the cliché you used here:

"She just told me that she has a boyfriend

Oh well, there’s other fish in the sea" can be overlooked as it still adds to the imagery but I have seen this a lot. Perhaps use a more original metaphor rather than one that's been used a lot?
But nonetheless it's a great topic The topic is certainly original and I loved reading about it.
I think the format here is great as well. Good experimenting!
Well I'm off as I have no true critique or suggestions.
Keep up the good work
and Keep writing!

Hello! KatyaElefant here for another review! Happy Review Day!

I can't say anything against this because I liked it a lot. Your grammar is pretty good and I have to say the same for your spelling. Your formatting! Oh my gosh! I loved it! The syllables are really cool. I love how it made a sideways pyramid! I feel like you could take this poem as something that is really sad. Also, I noticed that this is labeled as general and general. I could think that this could be realistic and even romantic. Is this a conversation but only one side? (Like as if you are listening to someone on the telephone?) I have to say that I hate guys that do this. I remember that this one guy asked me out and then when I said no, he was like good, it was an April Fools joke(the middle of December). I love how the end takes a dark turn. I love it when anything does that. Keep Writing! I really enjoyed this work! Have a happy review day!

Hello.
Kanome here with a review for you.

I love the way you formatted this. Like you said in your author's note c:
It's seems really cool for someone like to experiment something and it comes out well as the result.
Anyways, I love the poem.
I like story line in it also.
I consider it one of the best poems I ever read.

Anyways, keep up the good work. I can't wait to read more of your work c:

P.S The story seemed sad at the end D:

I really like how you presented your poem, using the syllables to make it interesting and really unique. It made you want to read it because it was different. I also just like your poem in general. It doesn't hold a lot of emotion but it really worked for the poem and they style in which you used. This poem also seems like it holds a lot of truth to you, which is really cool to read because everyone is different in every situation so it will always be a little different and unique. Overall, I really liked your poem, so great job.
Keep up the good writing!
- Roxie Rain