Swavvy123

Hi! This is great, love the language and the story Would just like to suggest a few things with regards to the structure/grammar: 1) Think line 5 should be "You ...

Hi there, Firstly, I feel like based on your title you really conveyed the message. There is no doubt that this is about two people who have affection for each ...

Hi there! I have to say that the title attracted me and I thought that I would read stuff talking about what keeps people awake in bed at night and ...

Hey there. I don't usually write poetry so I hope I'm able to review this well. Firstly, the title really attracted me. I feel like overall, you were able to ...

I liked this. I like the use of repititon, i feel like it really emphasized the depth of what you were trying to say. I feel like you really hit ...

Hi! Okay, I must say you've got a really good story here. We can understand what it's like to live in a traditional home and we also see what it's ...

Oh wow! I must say, I think this is really good. At first when I was reading it, I thought it would be like any other story. A dude in ...

HI! I have to say, the first few lines are really captivating. They made me want to read more. However, I feel like we haven't really gotten much out of ...

I ABSOFREAKINGLUTELY LOVED IT! I glanced through the other reviews on here. They talked about bad punctuation and the use of and's and whatnot but I think that only added ...

Hey! Firstly, congratulations on your first poem! I liked your poem. It's a very good attempt and you kept it simple which is a nice style. It gave off the ...

Hey there NeverNeverLandGirl, I really loved this poem, I felt like I could completely connect to how you're feeling. We all have that one friend that has made us feel ...

hi there Sheikh'sSpear, I must say, you're title is really very catchy and I like the tone of the poem and the style it's written in. It seems to go ...

Hi Karzkin, Nice idea you got going here. The tone of the poem was serious but it was kinda funny which is good. "283 kilometres since you left me burning" ...

hi there MemoryHunter :) I really enjoyed this piece. The title definitely caught my eye. It kept me on the edge, I wanted to see where it was going through ...

I have to say, this is lovely. I really enjoyed the second paragraph. Very nice choice of words. "How deep the pain inscribed, overwrote my mind..." Heck, I loved it ...