Hey there.
I don't usually write poetry so I hope I'm able to review this well.
Firstly, the title really attracted me.
I feel like overall, you were able to make me feel like you wanted me to feel. Despair and sadness...
like this lines for instance : "where are my wings, where are my kite strings"
I could feel what the poem persona was feeling quite clearly.
However, I'm a bit confused and I'm still not sure what your poem was about exactly. It just shifted between kites and butterflies and this is something I really think you should try and correct.
I'm not saying you should change your style or whatever but I just feel like its too vague.
I like the way you write and I hope to see more of it!
Cheers!
Points: 48
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