RebelWriter

This wasn't very clear... not sure of the point. You should add more details so we have a clear picture of what is occuring here. 'These faint sounds still rings ...

Wow. Angry is the vibe I get from this. Ok, errors: 'noone' is what you wrote but I think you meant no one; oppertunity is spelled opportunity; you put your ...

Being from Michigan, I can totally relate to this poem, haha. I really like this and the rhyme scheme and the adjectives you used. Very good. I hate winter, so ...

I like this a lot. Really I do. I have a tshirt that says, Cowgirl up, lol. Treat them like dirt and they will take flight. Perhaps instead you can ...

I commend you for your courage to write something like this, I would have been apprehensive, but that's just me. Grammatical errors will be ignored. I can understand your need ...

You put 'if' and meant 'of' in the sixth line of your poem. I liked it. It was simple and sweet. There was no rhyming,but that's ok. Not every poem ...

This was very peaceful and calming. I really liked it. Not all poems need to ride and this one proved that. There was a distinct melody,a lyrical feel to it ...

This was nice. I dont like the repitition of ' that light that I see' its redundant and can be taken out. 'Don't look at it, it'll burn your eyes' ...

I always hated Alice in Wonderland, both the movies and books. I found them painful to read and keep up with and irritatingly weird. I've read different takes on Alice ...

First hands and now lips...perhaps next noses? I liked it. A peanut butter and jelly sandwich causing sticky lips to smack, while humming the itsy bitsy spider. The purple imprint ...

Ooh, I love this version. May start singing it myself(to my siblings as I have NO kids). Only thing is any word referring to God, such as 'he' should be ...

Considering this is a mirror of your struggle, you did fine. This is very gold and touching. I'm a fall baby9,i love the fall. Its the most beautiful time of ...

This was so..... dark... and.... emotional....you had some spelling issues, meaning I's that should've been capitalized. This is graphic,not too graphic, but graphic none the less. Perhaps this is fro

I liked it. Won't critique grammar, but I'll point out you said "your" and I think you meant "you're". I think we all want to feel alive. To feel energized,empowered,awake ...

I never really thought to look at the many ways to use our hands, haha. But this was very creative and I really liked it. The different examples and subtle ...