Cold

Hey.

This was something really interesting. Imagery is used effectively here. Though your lines were too choppy (a mistake I usually make) and it didn't go well with the flow you started off with in the beginning.

I loved the ending.

"My hands are cold

The cold of snow

My heart is cold

The cold of woe"

I loved this part a lot, choppy but nice. These are places where short lines can be useful. Good thinking here.

Anyways, I think you could add a bit more content, this was just a skeleton without meat.

Good job though.

Keep writing and stay blessed.

xoxo

Being from Michigan, I can totally relate to this poem, haha. I really like this and the rhyme scheme and the adjectives you used. Very good. I hate winter, so I can't help but to chuckle as I read this. 'My hands are cold', YES! In winter my hands are cold. 'Snow on my lips, Snow on my hair', again, yes, when it snows our lips and hair are covered. When one can read a story or a poem and relate to them in real life.... You should feel accomplished. Winter is probably the loneliest season we must suffer through, its a cold and desolate season for many. When the wind blows its icy fingers rip away our warmth and leave us trembling,alone. Beautiful. Job well done.

Hope,

Beautiful! Just beautiful. I love your simple rhyme scheme and rhythm. I especially love the last few lines. The repetition creates a rare beauty.

I only have one question. When you write "And my heart in numb" it feels like it should be "is", but maybe you did mean "in."

Thank you so much for writing. I thoroughly enjoyed this poem and the emotion it caused me was startling. Keep writing!

Joy

winter is the best season, don't be mean to it!