Young Writers Society

I enjoyed the simple sweet rhythm which you wrote your poem. It's straight to the point while still containing your creativity. I personally can't find any issues with your poem as far as grammar goes that hasn't already been mentioned below, but the point is I think it's perfectly fine the way it is keep up the nice work! Remember that everyone has their own style and your's will never be wrong! P.S if this review seems broad I apologize. I'm not used to critiquing other writer's work and I normally prefer not to unless asked by a friend xD But anyways stay true to your work and instincts

Hi,
Let me first say that I liked your poem. It is simple and descriptive.
Some words of advice. Your rhythm becomes a little stilted when you end every line with a period. You might want to try and continue your thoughts forward into the next line to aid with the flow of the poem. You might try a few descriptors or unusual words to add depth to your poem as well. But you as the poet get to make to final call on all these things.
Once again, I really enjoyed it. It made me anxious for when things will finally get warm here in upstate New York. It reminded me of how much I miss the warmth and the sunshine....and for a poem, that means mission accomplished. Good luck.
Write on.

You put 'if' and meant 'of' in the sixth line of your poem. I liked it. It was simple and sweet. There was no rhyming,but that's ok. Not every poem needs to rhyme. This is fitting to the season we're in, birds are chirping,bees will be buzzing;flowers are swaying,almost as though they're dancing. I like that you did realistic attributes to each 'character', it made the poem seem more real. I can close my eyes and hear and see each flower dance to the beat of the rain drum and the breeze's song while the bees hum along. Very nice. Feel free to review my latest work, A Tragic End, please