Young Writers Society

Hey.

The first line kind of reminded me of Eminem's Mockingbird xD goes like, "now hush little baby, don't you cry, everything's gonna be alright"

Anyways, I liked it. It's short, but it's a lullaby after all. The rhyme scheme was good. I liked how you created a lullaby, which kids would love. If I think from a kiddo's point of view, I'd be like "wow, God sent me" Honestly, it was actually great.

Keep writing and stay blessed.

xo

Aw, this is really sweet. It's something I'd sing to my kid for sure.

There's not a lot I have to say here, mostly because it's so short and simple. Lullabies are generally short, and you follow that here, but you could expand it just a little bit more. And the thing is, people are still going to have bad days and feel like crying. So perhaps you could make it more along the lines of "you're going to have bad days, but you'll get through it and always remember God's love for you." You don't really have to, but it's an option.

And packaged with all God's love.

Mama's going to sing you, your own lullaby.

He kissed you on the forehead, as He whispered "goodbye"

Ooh, I love this version. May start singing it myself(to my siblings as I have NO kids). Only thing is any word referring to God, such as 'he' should be capitalized As God is a holy deity. Also I think 'heaven' gets capitalized too. I think any little kid would be soothed by this song, its very good. Perfect for naps or bedtime or perhaps thunderstorms too. I like the rhyming it's simple yet sweet. Favorite line, 'He wrapped you up with golden dreams' I really like that one. We need more dreams to come alive and bring out the child in us.