Hannah

So! I appreciate that you managed to let me know what Dawnguard very efficiently. You gave the general history of Skyrim very succinctly, and that's a feat to pull off, ...

Girl, this is what you did: you described the image exactly as you saw it in your head, but the problem was that you were only focusing on transcribing the ...

Alright, and now this one. It's a little ruined for me since you told me what it was about before I read it, so I'll try to do my best ...

I think part of the reason people didn't worry about the rhyme scheme here was because for many of the lines, they didn't rhyme. Objects and conflicts don't rhyme; neither ...

Why does this girl have cuts on her hands? That is my number one question. But besides that, welcome to YWS! Now, usually when locations are well-known for being suicide ...

Haha, this is cute! Thank you for taking the time to write this up and submit this, whether this was a true story or not. Since you wrote it using ...

eek! you had it for about two lines, but lost it to the strict rhyme scheme. i haven't reviewed anything from you before, so i don't know if this is ...

Hi! Long ago, before the first age when the stars shone with song all day, and the sun never set, yet never rose, and dwelled on the horizon in endless ...

What? What? Your dreams and hopes sweep aside your great desires? no, i'm sorry, i can't understand the logic or flow in this. i /am/ impressed that you've managed to ...

you've begun but you've only just begun and already you've finished? this is not the end of this piece. you MUST push it further. you've found the moment of intense ...

Number one: go through and highlight EVERY SINGLE TIME you say "it" or "they" or otherwise vague pronouns. This is the downfall of your essay. Rather than leading the reader ...

i cannot grasp anything from this poem, because you've not taken the time to focus on anything in it. you've just moved through and past thoughts you had while trying ...

first, we are insects in amber only seems out of place because of the exclamation point. why why why would you use an exclamation point? they are precious things in ...

lovely, lovely, lovely, just this slice of the image. but you can do better. i know you can. first of all, coal does not happen in strands like hair, but ...

I'm hesitant to review this because it seems to be so personal, but if you're up to it, it could really stand to move others if you could stand to ...