Epicdonkalous

Hey there! I am not a romance fan, at all, but I loved this. I thought you captured the spirit of "love (or in this case, attraction) at first sight, ...

Hey there! I like the concept of this poem, but I found a few technical errors. * Tongues * remove the comma after "hours" * your, not you're in the ...

Hey there! Though I'm not a fan of romances (which I think is where you are heading with this), this wasn't bad. I thik it was fine for a prologue, ...

Hey there! I liked that you personified happiness as something that is fleeting. There is not much to review, other than a few small details I thought were slightly off. ...

Hey there! I'm slightly lost as to the intention of this poem. I get that it's a warning, but was it meant to be funny, or just a random poem? ...

Hey there! Okay. As Dasiamari commented, there are a bunch of errors grammar/spelling wise, too many to correct. I think that you should divide this into stanzas, to make it ...

Hey there! I liked this quite a bit. I like how you didn't take a typical stand on depression, like 'woe is me, I'm so sad, boo-hoo", but actually made ...

Hey there! Yes, this is quite Owl City. You managed to capture the child-like bliss that their songs tend to have, so bravo. I noticed a few grammar/spelling errors, such ...

Hey there! I think this is quite humorous, and a bit-true-to-life. I think you expressed the characters feelings well, along with the situation without it being too outlandish. I did ...

Hey there! Alright. I think this is a bit pointless. It doesn't really have much substance, or depth, or maybe you just hid it well. Also, it is not very ...

Hey there! To start off with - I believe that the concept for this is quite nice, though I don't think you elaborated enough to thoroughly explain your meaning. That ...

Hey there! Um, I sort of don't understand this. Who is the protagonist supposed to be? I just feel as though this is just random thoughts, which it's supposed to ...

Hey there! I. Adore. This. So. Much! I think that there is an aloofness, a coolness, a distance, about it, that makes the lyrics itself very seductive. Your flow is ...

Hey there! The title made me click, because I thought it would be a deep poem about the oppression of immigrants. Was I surprised! I mean this in a good ...

Hey there! I happen to like this quite a bit. Many "artists" now try to capture "realistic" relationships and fail to actually include the realism part, but I think you ...