Hey there!
Alright. I think this is a bit pointless. It doesn't really have much substance, or depth, or maybe you just hid it well. Also, it is not very well written. There should be spaces in-between the hushes in the chorus. Sence is supposed to be since, which might have just been a fluke error. I'm assuming the speaker is angry that the couple he/she hears is not him/her and their lover? I think that you should emphasize and elaborate on that meaning in a more tasteful way, rather then masking it so. But I do think you know what makes a nice hook, so play on that.
~Epic
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