Diana2357

Antharius, this is an interesting piece. Unlike you, I can't wait for summer to do NOTHING. I would love to do NOTHING for a day. About your writing, you used ...

Ricardo, this is a short and cute poem. I agree with the formers, you could have mentioned how they lost their whiskers and toes. Besides that, it seems like a ...

Yes Rosy, the new one below looks far better. I like the rhyme scheme and especially the message. This is something nice to share with mom for mother's day. Keep ...

I loved your use of vivid verbs and imagery. Also, I like how you ended your piece by stating that the photograph in your wall doesn't represented the playground, but ...

Saily, nice job with rhythm and rhyme. It is short, but perhaps you can extend by adding a few more lines, yet keeping the rhythm. Super cute, keep writing. Hurtado

Hmmm is this someone I know from class? j/k. First of all, your title doesn't fit this piece because you never really lost this love. I love your your simile ...

Vic, I sense your love for music. I liked how you mentioned the "beat of your heart" and "typing of the keyboard" as music to say that music is everywhere. ...

Xoschill, this is a nice piece about love and curiousity. I understand your point, sometimes women over think too much instead of just going with the flow (of course, cautiously) ...

Kat, this is very sweet and true. Kat, I found a few grammar errors that made it hard for me to follow so I had to reread twice. Also, I ...

Daniel, this is cute but it's missing a few things. Since this is a love poem, I would add more imagery and descriptive words, perhaps try a rhyming scheme. Also, ...

Kev, not sure if I would categorize this as poetry or even a prose because there isn't too much imagery and descriptive words. I found few grammar mistakes, but overall, ...

Laz, I like the meaning of your poem, but here is "ONE WAY" to fix this. First start with using quotations correctly, ex: "they way you talk"... it is hard ...

Hi Rachel. Pretty intriguing. Wow I wish I was pranked like that except for the tieing part. Anyway, good description on the events but you could add a bit more ...

HI Imtheceo. Nice work with imagery and power verbs, yet some of the stanzas were unclear perhaps because of the few grammar errors. I was able to make out the ...

Yanelis, this was a very touching poem and very sad. I agree with the prior posting feedback about imagery like sensory details or figurative language to give this more life ...