Roses are red violets are blue

Hello there, Swiftfur here, reporting for duty.
I liked this poem very much, it's very, well, (That was horrible, let me restart.) The beginning
is the part that really hooks the reader in.
But, there are a few grammatical mistakes.
1: Capitalization. Whenever you have a new line, capitalize the first letter of the first word.
2:Commas. You're missing several commas, just saying. adding them helps with the flow off the poem.
3: Spacing.There is only one thing you didn't put a space between; stop, and talking.

That's all.
I loved your poem, it's very good. I'll have to bookmark this page. *bookmarks the page*

Good-bye, for now. *Salutes*
~Swiftfur

Hi there, Roxy here!

I Like the way you took this well known poem sentence and turned it into your own! Very creative!
I can see that any grammatical errors were already pointed out so I wont go through them again!
I would have liked to have seen a little more of your personality in this poem! Why will you always love him/her? What makes your love special to you? Like Diana said down below, add a little more desciption and imagery!

But I do think that it was a cute love poem!

Keep on writing!

Daniel, this is cute but it's missing a few things. Since this is a love poem, I would add more imagery and descriptive words, perhaps try a rhyming scheme. Also, add the missing commas so it won't be hard to follow. Keep writing. Hurtado

Wassupppp!

Hi, I'm Nargles and I am here to give a completely professional and helpful review.
I like this poem, it was intriguing. The title alone makes it seem interesting, I mean the fact that it is named 'Roses are red violets are blue' would make anybody curious, mainly to see if it was a cliche.
While Kaylyn said it was, I didn't find it so, you took a well known line, and made it your own.
You do have some technical errors which can be fixed up but I won't go into them because they have been mentioned previously.
One thing which I liked about this poem was that it could be seen as a serious love poem or seen as a satirical poem mocking love poems. I don't know which one you are going for, but either way they work.

It is after midnight were I am, so I think if I go into to much detail it will fall into a mess of incoherent jimble jumble.
Good job though and keep writing.
Nargles xxxx

Hi there, Daniel.

This is actually not as bad as it could be. However, it doesn't uncheck the fact that it could use some improvements. We can start with the basics; grammar. Remember that all I's should be capitalized when you use them as pronounced. Also~ "I'll" is made out of two words "I" and "will", therefore the apostrophe in "I'll" cannot be absent (especially because "ill" means something completely different from what you meant.

I also like how Kaylyn suggested you to organize the poem; it looks more professional and easier to read. She also mentioned how your piece is cliche. But! Do keep in mind that the difference between cliche and not-cliche is not what you say but how you say it. By this I mean that what could save your words from that horrible label called cliche is probably more imagery and rhetorical figures! Yes, rhetorical figures. You can definitely use metaphors to express how you feel in a creative way. Take the simple and make it art. Show us how you can see the world! That would be entertaining. And once something is entertaining, it is saved from cliche.

That's pretty much all I've got to say. Hopefully, I expressed myself correctly. However, feel free to PM me if you have any questions.

~GeeLyria

Some technical things:
Roses are red violets are blue [Add , at end of the line]
No matter what ill still love you [It's "I'll", this is not a text message]
even if you don't accept my love [Capitalize the E here]
my love will always be for you [Capitalize M]
we can seperate [Capitalize W, add in comma at the end]
we can stop talking [Capitalize W, add in comma]
but in the future [Capitalize B, add comma]
we will be together
even if it starts killing us [Please just take out this line]

Ok, here are some other issues. This is honestly way too cliche. Its a teenage love poem, with the whole typical "Oh but I love you so much and I'll just do anything to stay with you" There are other ways to convey this without coming out and saying it that way. Get creative, throw in some non-typical synonyms, not "your hair shines like the sun/eyes sparkle like the stars" nonsense, but use your imagination. I can see your a beginner, but you'll get the hang of it, and critiques will help you get even better. Keep writing!