Cat rat tat

Awesome poem! I liked this all and here's why: it's fun.

Also, there's an actual moral or lesson to be taken away from here after reading. Don't let any residing anger take over your life; instead, let kindness do that job. You'll be happier and also there'll be less stress. I think everyone should take this advice for what it's worth and apply to everything in their lives. So thank you for the awesome advice. I know I'll be sure to take it!

I only noticed a typo here:

The cat lost alll his whiskers,

I love this poem! For me, it sounded just like Hickory Dickory Dock (I think that's it). It sounded just like a child's nursery rhyme. I must say however, that it lost its appeal at the fifth line. It broke the flow of the poem. If you re-did the lines underneath it until they resembled the top part, this poem would be perfect. I might ask how these lines are relevant to the top part as well.
Oh, and by the way, on the third line, you put all with three "L's".
Apart from that, I liked it.

This is probably one of the most simplest but affective poem I have ever read! It isn't my favorite but it isn't my least favorite. It is probably about in the middle.

I almost judged this poem by the title but I decided to have a look and I must say I am glad that I did!

Ricardo, this is a short and cute poem. I agree with the formers, you could have mentioned how they lost their whiskers and toes. Besides that, it seems like a child riddle type poem since it ended with a moral. See if you can extend it a bit more. Good job, keep writing. Hurtado

I liked this poem a lot but, why is it part of action and adventure. The Poem doesn't pass off like that but that's just me.
Also I wonder what blew and blew and took the cats whiskers and the rats toes. There is not enough information to support that.

The sing songy nature of this really gets interrupted by the fifth and sixth line, I think that shows that they need some editing. Personally I would rather you show more about the rat and the cat who played tit for tat than telling me what not to do. I like the last part, telling me what is good to do, and what the result of being good will do, but the first part of that section is just kind of annoying and preachy because of the No no no, don't do bad little grasshopper tone.

I would rather discover that on my own. Also, I don't really see where I have anything to do with the cat and the rat, So take the human speaker out of it completely and just leave it as the cat and the rat. Not only will it give you more room to express what they're doing, but it will give you less of a moral obligation to tell us what to do.

To fill the space, you might consider putting in how the feud started, like if they just ran across one another, or if this was something that happened due to the rat stealing something, or the cat wanting something to eat. It would help give us that feeling of anger between the two of them instead of you telling us they were angry.

Hi there, Ricardo.

I'm GeeLyria and I'm here to review for you. Hm. This was quite enjoyable. Although, the lack of periods made this somewhat confusing. This poem is, literally, one sentence, according to what you have done with it. I would suggest you to start and end the sentences where it's more appropriate; mainly because if your readers have to read again, you don't want it to be because they're confused (but because they really liked your piece).

That's pretty much all I've got to say.

~GeeLyria

Hi Ricardoantelo and welcome to YWS! Here to give this short piece a review!

The first part, I liked. It was cute, snappy, and gets the point across. It has a simple feel, but it's still unique.

The last four lines, however, I wasn't so crazy about. Now, with something short like this and geared to a parable, flat out stating the moral of the story is fine. However, you have to be careful with rhyme schemes. You rhymed life with life and be with be, which is rather lazy in my opinion. I'd rework this to include more natural rhymes. Also, you have commas, in the middle, of the line which makes, about as much sense, as the commas in this sentence. I would re-punctuate your piece like this.

A cat and rat played tit for tat,
I watched it blow by blow.
The cat lost all his whiskers.
The rat lost all his toes.
Don't let your anger take your life,
The moral must surely be.
Let kindness come to rule your life,
And happy you will be.

This poem made me laugh so much.