Over thinking

Xoschill, this is a nice piece about love and curiousity. I understand your point, sometimes women over think too much instead of just going with the flow (of course, cautiously) and we torment ourselves when we think too much. You need to be careful with tense and verb endings, you seem to be missing your "S" at times. Also, this would sound so much better if you would rephrase some of the longer lines by shortening them a little using syllabic counting to have a more flowing rhythm. Nice work, keep writing. Hurtado

You could say, "There are times when...". It depends on whether you are tying to write it in present tense or past tense. I think you are trying to write in present tense.

It also seems to me that the poem isn't about over thinking so much as it is about a relationship. You talk about "falling in love" and thinking "about us". There's nothing wrong with writing about love and relationships, but the title doesn't really match.

yeah, there are some grammar errors, but it's not that bad. It only takes away from the meaning a little bit. Your punctuation at the end of stanzas, however, could use some work. A simple thing like punctuation can make or break a poem's rhythm. This poem's seems to be a somewhat interrupted because of the wacky punctuation. People really do pause and stop according to punctuation when they're reading something, so it's important that it's placed in the right spot. But other than that, I like the message and the wonderful word choices in this poem. Very Nicely done, literature-wise!

Okay first of all spelling/grammar errors!
Your first sentence should probably go "There was a time where all I would do is think" (just to have it make more sense). "Sometime" needs an S on the end. Your other starting sentences of stanzas should say "there was a time that....". "Hundred" needs an S on it as well. There also needs to be punctuation at the end of every line.
I don't really understand the importance of the line about the baby tiger. It didn't exactly make sense so I would set it up a little more.
I'm not going to lie, this poem needs a little work. It needs a little more mature language in it (mature meaning descriptive words). The idea could also be a tad more developed within the poem. I know what you were getting at but the picture needs to be colored in now. I did however enjoy the chocolate analogy. Not bad for a first go!
Happy Writing!