Huddle up!

this was a bizarre poem and I found it was a little short but that's fine anyways I would add another line to the poem and I would advise you to rename it perhaps but other then that its a neat little poem and I enjoyed reading it other then that I don't know what else I can tell you and I'm not exactly sure if you are talking about how you don't like to get your photo taken or how your trying to take a photo a bit confusing but that's ok I hope you take the time to read this review and I really hope you can explain to me in perhaps a message or a reply exactly what its about anyways yet again I liked it and you should keep up the good work

Hi Imtheceo,

I don't know what I think about this, to be honest. Is this poem about how you don't like photos of you being taken? I feel like it's rather empty and not special. You use words well, but you need to fix some spelling and grammar. If you fix those, it's makes the overall poem easier to read.

Deanie x

HI Imtheceo. Nice work with imagery and power verbs, yet some of the stanzas were unclear perhaps because of the few grammar errors. I was able to make out the correct words for the misspelling "view, chinese,". But I like how to describe such as simple task as taking a picture so descriptively. Hurtado

Hello Imtheceao!

I am going to review your poem you got here.

I am not sure if there is supposed to be a deeper message here, or if it is just about how you don't like pictures... hmm.

You may want to separate this into some stanzas, because it would make it easier to read.

"...yet their all warming and unfamiliar to me.


Should I smile, a funny face, or just go all out,''

There would be a good part to break it. There is a natural break there so it wouldn't seem off.

Also, there are a bit punctuation errors and grammar errors, but those are a easy fix. Example here:
" January skies hover above,
random faces fill in the gaps,
some are enchanting others repulsive,
yet their all warming and unfamiliar to me."

You might would like to put a period after 'gaps' so it doesn't seem like a run-on sentence and possibly a comma after 'enchanting' since you are starting to list things off.

And:

"Dozens of mini flashes blind my veiw,
the picture is ruined a waivy smile
and Chines eyes make me scream out,''Retake it!''

I think you meant 'view', 'wavy', and 'Chinese.'

All in all this was a good piece! But if you wanted a deeper meaning, you might want to put more hints in there.

If you have any questions, just PM me!