The Doctor still walking and still carrying a unconscious Rose through the abandoned and desolated city of Scaro saw how much trouble he and Rose were becuase as they got nearer to the Daleks head quarters the more Daleks appeared and this meant it would be nearly impossible to escape - even for the Doctor. Suddenly the Dalek screamed " you will stop and put your companion down beside you ". The Doctor could do nothing but agree to the Dalek terms. The Doctor and Rose were in a dark and frail cell that only had one door and no window. The Doctor desperately tried wake Rose up from what seemed to, be a coma like state but failed.
Suddenly without any warning the Dalek that had lead them to this foul and disgusting cell came in and said "you will bring the girl with you and if you dont comply you will be exterminated" Yet again the Doctor was powerless and he knew one wrong move would lead to Roses death.
As the Doctor began to carry Rose she began to say something to the Doctor "Doctor save me" and thats all the Doctor manged to here before she fell back into the deep coma that she was in before. The Doctor and the Dalek walked for ages until the Doctor finally managed to ask the Dalek a question.
" Why do you need Rose for , she is just a ordinary girl " The Dalek replied " we need her to help destroy the one person you thought was long dead … the master" The Doctor looked at the smug Daleks in shock and disbelief and then replied " why is Rose in a coma , and the master is dead"
The dalek replied " becuase we her brain to turn him into a normal human and use him that way to conquer the earth , the master yes is dead but we are going to use time lord technology to resurrect him and use him in this endless bitter war" The Doctor looking stern and cold replied " what war , against who" The evil demented Dalek replied "you" and all of a sudden the Doctor was hugging Rose tighter in the hope that she would wake up.... to be continued
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So again I thought I would review this.
It is so amazing I love it so much. And Again I'm not sure how daleks can have facial expressions but I could see them being smug for some reason. Also I found the following typos.
When you said
The doctor desperately tried wake rose up.
Andwhen you said
Because we her brain.
Otherwise amazing work and I hope to read more soon!!
dont forget I posted the whole story on here yesterday - doctor who the resserection
Oh rlly??? I shall read it so soon then!!
the whole story is on here
Ok. So. The first sentence is a major run on, and your many spelling errors and even missed words break up the full chapter so much. The grammer and tense is also loose. You jumped tenses once or twice and that kills a story. Being a long time Doctor who fan, I can get behind this but it needs to be cleaned alot more.
Ex: the very last paragraph sentence 1 reads.
Because we her brain....ect
It should read: because we need her brain...ect