Fistly I have to say that I so happy that I have found somebody else on this site writing histrorical fiction:) I both love to write and read that genre.
Heading on to the review. I think this could truly become great! I like your choosing of words and the beginning I find especially well written and intruiging. However I think you could add a lot more detail to this first chapter. I would be even more tempted to continue reading if you were to for example introduce the main character by name and add even more emotion and discriptions. That would make it a bit more memorable wich I think you could benefit from since it is such an interestiing subject that you have wisely chosen to write about. I would also suggest adding full stops and big letters since that makes it easier to read. Other small things to chance is for example "woman" instead of "women" and to write out what you are refering to instead of "jthe". I really hope that this doesn't bring you down. I really think you have got a real good idea here!
Keep writing!
Points: 520
Reviews: 8
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