Knife crime is serious and there is a rising problem in this category. I also believe weapon checks should be harsher and more police on our streets of Britain. A few errors in the piece itself like commas in the wrong spot and no capital letters in places. Try and take a bit more time in the piece. Go back and check it because it really makes the difference. Seeing capital letters and punctuation really makes the piece sound more formal and will make the piece seem more serious. Well I hope this helped and I really like that you are strong and you are not scared to speak out what you stand for!!!
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