If this review is kinda the short one, I am sorry at advance. I may not be so good with poems even if I try to. Well, we all learn, right?
Maybe someone before me had told you in a review that the start and end is kind of..
I do not know how to exactly say it but they are not the best they can be. At the beginning, it was kind of odd for me and I noticed the smooth flow and rhyme later in the part which needs to be actually seperated from the first one. I think that it will look twice better if you seperate them in stanzas. It will look better and we will know exactly when to stop, take a breath and read the next part of the poem. This is optional but it is better done.
I totally understand why you had started every single line with a capital letter. I see it as a style writers use to write poems which is totally fine and I do not find it for a mistake or anything like that but you change your style or writing midway and suddenly it turns out what you start the lines with small letters. I think you need to choose what you want from them and edit the whole poem in only one style, one of them. I would prefer to see this with each line starting with a capital letter. I like the way you had started it and it would be great to end it this way.
I actually find the wolves as creatures who are not that nice towards other beings, mostly towards humans, but you had showed them in a very different light. You show the reader that not only one type is there and one could be good, other could be bad.
For the grammar and punctuation, I do not find why would I complain about it because it has no problems with it.
Some parts were really odd and maybe could be called boring but overall, it was a very good read that worth it. I think it can be even better. Maybe the main reason why this can be double better is that the start can be rewrote in a way that connects the sadness and the wolf more or with a rhyme. I do not know exactly.
Keep on writing, dear writer.
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