He makes me smile
My real smile,
He makes me laugh
My real laugh,
He makes me
Who I want to be
He makes me feel
So happy,
He makes me feel
Amazing,
He makes me feel
Like myself.
When he looks at me
I melt,
When he smiles at me
I get warm and fuzzy,
When he hugs me,
My heart beats faster.
He makes me
Feel safe,
He makes me
Feel noticed,
He makes me,
Feel inspired.
He doesn’t seem to care,
That I am a shattered doll,
That has been broken,
So many times
And despite my flaws,
I think he,
Could be the one.
I never used to dream,
At all,
Never used to fall asleep,
Easily,
He makes it easier.
He makes me,
Believe in true love,
All over again,
He makes me,
Believe in myself,
All over again,
He completes me,
He makes me.
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This is such a sweet poem!!! I love it! Its awesome! However, just one thing I would like to tell you.
The part where you say:
Here, I think if you removed Easily it would be better because you're repeating the same word twice in the same line.
This is my favourite paragraph! I love it!
Keep up the good job!
HarryPotterRocks
The only word my mind could conjure up was
Fantastic.
I'm not really big in poetry and such, but this is utterly amazing.
Good job
Wow, I really liked it. Does this guy you wrote about happen to have a brother?
I'm just kidding, of course, but I thought your piece was great! The rythm was a little wierd, and I didn't really see a structure. Now, poems don't need to rhyme, but they should flow smoothly.
Other than that, well done!!
Razzle
You Did GREAT