Young Writers Society

Bruh. This was great. Your word choice was fantastic, your imagery was there...seriously, I think you nailed it. I think what you did here was beautifully nuanced and not in your face at all. I think that as the reader, I would've like your to be a little less vague so I could understand the message just a little bit better. I think the problem with most poems about abuse is that they're all very upfront and they beat you in the eye with a rock (ha) with how much they're about abuse. I think this does a good job of just setting up the imagery and leaving it a bit up to interpretation. Well done.

Wauw...this is amazing. Some great stuff, really nice. Well written, with lots of emotions and bringing tears to my face (tears of joy, that is). It is something really great and the stuff of wonders. I really like it and (or at least for sofar I understood) because it is talking about absentee fathers it is a personal theme for me. Seems something great, really wish to read more of your stuff in the future, since it seems that a have a great writer before me. Really awesome.

This is a pretty deep poem