I've been gone for far too long. o__o I see I have a lot of catching up to do! xD
After I spending two hours in a cubby hole
Hi there! Noelle here for a Review Day review!How do you only have one review on this chapter? *shakes head* People are lame.I had to go back and reread the last chapter 'cause I read it so long ago -_- But I refreshed my memory so I could give a good review of this chapter.I would've really liked to see more description in this chapter. What exactly does the ship look like? How cramped is the cubby hole that she's been spending all this time in? Details, details, details. I had a general idea in my mind of what the ship looked like, but I'd like to know specifics. How does it differ from her ship? And how much is she freaking out that she is stuck in this ship? Just some general stuff that I want to know more about.Pies seems to have pointed out all of the typos you've made so I'm going to stick with the characters and plot. Not that I usually review for grammar and spelling but whatever. I think you're doing a good job keeping up the development of your MC (I'm embarrassed to say that I forget her name. I know it's not Liv...). I like how we get to see her knowledge of pirates and the way ships work by talking to the man on guard. He says he's in good favor with the captain, but he's really not and she can tell since he's not following the captain around. It's just a simple comment, but it's so important in the development of your MC.Alrighty then, I'm onto the next chapter!Keep writing!**Noelle**
Hey Aurora! I’m here for your review! Finally~! I have one thing I want to poke you on before we move into the more meaty parts of the review. At least, the parts i like better, but let’s not ramble anymore. Also I don’t have much to pick this week! YAY!You have a hundred and sixty eight hours to write! Edit, edit, edit. I know we tire of editing sometimes, but hey, these things help us improve! Now on to the nitpicks.
After I spending two hours in a cubby hole, I want to shoot myself- or the crew-, but I settle for stealing their liquor every time they left the room.
I catch myself nodding off a few times and shake myself awake. Being slightly drunk, I decide not to wander around the ship but instead amuse myself by counting the specks of dust in the air.
Taking the rotten and moldy stairs two at I time, I approach the brig, making sure that I don't creak. I pause on the last step because I know that there will be a guard, but take a deep breath and slip in. The pirate on duty leaps up, sword drawn. I throw back my cowl and burst into great, heaving sobs.
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