Who am I?
Down-trodden with the images of my sins.
Greedy and selfish
To satisfy the desires of my flesh.
How can I play the saint
If I am haunted by debauchery?
Lifeless under the weight of my mistakes;
I am a prisoner of the physical.
Torn apart between morality and pleasure .
A broken soul,
Seeking a contrite heart.
This is bondage.
Raw and besmirched.
Lord, save me!
In darkness I lie
A wounded soul
Tortured by lust.
I lick my spittle in content.
My life, a mixture
Of wounded demons feasting on the remains of my darkness
And light that I see not.
Until....
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Holla Temi. I just need to say that this is a very good poem. Your description was flawless and it didnt fail to convey a good message to the reader. Grammar, punctuation and description, it was all just flawless, and i just enjoyed reading it. keep up the good job. Would love to read more.
cheers
Catherin
Hello there! Hopeless here to give you a review!
Ok so let's jump on in. First off.. Wow this poem is amazing it brought back old thoughts and memories, so good job on that. And the fact that it is so nicely written is even better. Your grammar, spelling, and punctuation is great too. Very good on this poem I know that people and writers can relate to this poem and that's something great! Most people cant do that with their poems or work, it's a gift. So great job on the poem.
Keep writing and stay beautiful!!
~hopeless
I wish I understood poetry a little more so I could give you a nice lovely review.... But I really liked it, it was very detailed for such a short poem. It brought someone broken and suffering to my mind.....
Hope this helped, even if only a little.
Thank you. It's okay...