Wavelength Heartbeats

Woohoo! Time for another review. Once again, I'm going to go through and critique each stanza. Then I'll share my overall feelings about the poem. Let's get started.

Stanza One

I've done that before, and I've always wondered if other people do that. So far we're off to a good start.

Stanza Two

There's a typo in the first line, no biggy. It starts getting confusing towards the end. It sounds like you have a good idea, but it just needs to be written more clearly. Try to avoid expressing ideas in too abstract a manner in a poem like this one, or you'll just confuse the reader.

Stanza Three

I like where this stanza takes the poem. If this poem were a story, we would've just been introduced to the conflict. She's wondering if this guy can understand her weirdness. That's a feeling a lot of people can relate too. Nice!

Stanza Four

You ended this poem very nicely! You always end with a bang, which is a great skill to have as a poet. My only complaint is starting this stanza with 'and'. It threw me for a loop, and I didn't catch on until I went back and read the last stanza. That's something you want to avoid as much as possible. Replacing that 'and' somehow, and still letting the reader know this stanza is 'continued' from the last, and this stanza will be perfect.

Nicely done Story! I'm glad I got you for Secret Santa. You have some mad poetry skills. Keep up the great work!

I truly enjoyed it. I can say from experiance that you captured this feeliing perfectly. Symbolism was nicely used, and the flow of the wrods was perfect. Just one thing about hismother, should have been his mother. But that was the only mistake I saw. I loved the way you wrote it, the format. Please write more, I would love to read whatever you write. 4 1/2 stars.

I'm not a poet, so don't quote me on this, but I thought the poem was lovely.
Except for a few bumps, I think it flowed nicely and sounded good.

Just a couple comments though,
first;