“What matters more? The play itself, or your part in it?”
“What’s done today is one less to do tomorrow,”
“If at first you don’t succeed, try, try again,”
“There’s nothing to fear but fear itself,”
“Sticks and stones may break my bones, but words will never hurt me,”
“It’s a lie,”
“I’m dying on the inside, but my mind is still free,”
“All things that rise will fall, and all things that live will die,”
“I’m so sorry,”
“Goodbye,”
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This is a really cool concept. I loved the fluency in the poem. I feel as if this is a speech from someone to everyone that has hurt them before. For my one suggestion, I think that maybe you could add a divider at the bottom and put where you got all of the quotes from. It would bring a cool background and more relation and nostalgia to the piece of work.
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I liked this a lot. Keep writing!!!
- h
Thank you so much!
And that's a very good idea; I'll do that!
Hi!!
I think this is a really interesting idea. I love quotes, especially ones I can use to describe the life moment I am going through right now. I think this poem progress with each line. I think it would look better written in the middle of the page instead of aligned to the left side of the page, but that's just a personal preference. I think it's fitting to say goodbye at the ending, but I was wondering if the comma at the end was suppose to be a period or not an ending? I was just wondering where you found your quotes?
Thanks for the great read,
Tiffany
Thanks Rascalover
I'll reformat if I can; I think there are limitations to the yws formatting, but I'll check again!
And I suppose it would look better with a period 0-0 More final... *adds to list*
Hm... Oh dear, I hope I can remember. Let's see.. the first is from the Lutece twins in Bioshock Infinite: Burial at Sea. The next two I have no idea; just things everyone has repeated as I grew up. The third is Kennedy, I do believe. The fourth is my school's old mantra. The fifth is from a book... I can't recall which, but it was the supporting character's catchphrase in a way, and I loved her personality dearly XD The next two are from anime, and the last two can be found nearly everywhere. Picking my memory, basically XD And, gah, I meant to push some Mary Read quotes from AC4... Oh well...
Thanks again!
Im so impressed you remember all of that!!