To Judge

It's actually good that you vent anger through poetry, because it makes it more powerful and innovative. Nowadays a lot of people get judged by the most mundane things, so it's good that you've used stuff like "on a speck of dust" to show how meagre the problems are. It also gives a light touch to the poem even though it's supposed to be about judgement. Keep up with the good work. Love to see more of your writing.

It's actually good that you vent anger through poetry, because it makes it more powerful and innovative. Nowadays a lot of people get judged by the most mundane things, so it's good that you've used stuff like "on a speck of dust" to show how meagre the problems are. It also gives a light touch to the poem even though it's supposed to be about judgement. Keep up with the good work. Love to see more of your writing.

This is very well written and I love the rhyme,
It all make sense, because we live in such a judgmental word.
People judge everyday, but fail to look at their own eyes,
They'd much rather judge someone else than take a look in the mirror.
One day we will all be judged by God and every knee shall bow.
My favorite part is the ending when you said "Until I may judge you."
Your awesome! Keep up the good work.

This is a really cool poem. I like the rhythm to it and the passion really shows in the words. That's a really good coping mechanism, to chant when you're upset. I'll have to try it sometime Awesome poem, anyway, and I love your profile picture!

I really truly and honestly loved this poem. It has a great message and it really cheered me up because I'm going through a dilemma right now involving people judging me. I like the rhyme scheme! The rhymes weren't cliche (I dunno how to add accents) at all and I really got a professional vibe from reading this. I especially love love LOVE the last two lines. It really gets you thinking and at the same time makes a person feel highly about themselves even when they know they are being judged. Good job! Keep writing!

"Judge me only as soon as I may judge you."

This is a great message and certainly one that all of us need reminding once in awhile, but I've got an issue or two with your content! What makes the poem, itself, just shy of being a really powerful, really good poem, is the lack of consistency within your examples. Hear me out.

See, I can group what you used into categories:

Accomplishments:
Judge when I...
1. learn to speak
2. reach my peak
3. learn to write
4. learn to fight
5. become sane

Imperfections:
Judge when I...
1. speck of dust
2. turns to rust
3. note goes sour
4. miss the hour

And then you have this singular, descriptive category:

Descriptor:
Judge my screams...
1. that echo with the pain

The entire message of the poem that I paraphrased earlier in quotations, is a great message, but because there is not one singular "subject" that you latch on to, the poem is spread a little thin, I think. If it were concentrated - if you took, for instance, only the accomplishments that you demanded no one judge you on, then not only would your overall message still shine through but you'd have a lot more bang for your buck. You would get to your message a lot sooner. On the whole, the poem would become more concise.

To be truthful, I didn't know you would reach the conclusion that you did when I began the poem. After finishing the poem, I understood completely where you meant to go the whole time, but it would have been even better if I could have known from the start, so I could have that real powerful, defiant, and strong feeling growing as I kept on reading.

It's great! I understand why you'd recite this often, but I hope you'll take my suggestions into consideration and tell me if you disagree.