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Young Writers Society



Group Observation Performed By One

by Sherri


To observe is to see as clear

As an sunny summer day.

To listen for details constantly

Helps to hear what they don't say.

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To hold back words

From your own lips

And listen for others

Where poison drips.

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To understand relation

Between members of a group,

And listen for the track

As it plays in a loop.

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From happiness so light,

To an animosity dark.

A careless wandering fish,

To a prowling shark.

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To see the crack in the mask;

The twitch that jerks the eye.

To see aversion to direct contact;

All tell-tale signs of a lie.

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I have found that by hanging back,

You're less likely to burn.

I have found that the less you say,

The more you tend to learn.

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I try to watch every move,

And observe every action;

To never speak personally,

But to watch your own reaction.

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To anger some lash out,

To lies some tend to whine.

It doesn't matter what I see;

I'm learning, so I'm fine.

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Leave me to my perch right here

In a solitary corner of the room,

Watching others talk and talk,

Chatting to their own doom.

*

Let me watch the emotion roar

As words are turned to knives.

Let me watch the insults grow,

Itching at the mind like hives.

*

I'll watch as feelings change;

The effect is universal.

It all feels so predictable,

It's almost like a rehearsal.

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She spits, they hiss, all of them bite,

He moderates, but they ignore.

Back and forth nonstop, I tell you;

It's become quite the bore

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I learn from this, from their mistakes;

Learn how to start and prevent a riot.

The most valuable thing I learned, however,

Was how and when to be quiet.

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See, I think people talk too much

Without heed to what comes out.

This either leads to awkwardness

Or scratch, yowl, hiss, and shout.

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Glance at my silence,

Like a shadow passing by

Barely ever making a sound;

Makes you wonder: Why?

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Try it once, it's kind of fun

To see it all unfold;

It's educational to listen

Without speaking or being told.

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To hear the chimes of voices;

To listen as words rot;

To lean back and say nothing,

And hear many a thought.

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You think it strange I sit alone

And watch everything you do.

That's fine because, in the end,

I probably know more than you.


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Sat Jun 28, 2014 1:18 am
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Hello! KatyaElefant here to review! Let's see...0-) Oh my gosh! This poem is amazing.

I have to say. You did a marvelous job with this poem. My favorite lines are:

You think it strange I sit alone
And watch everything you do.
That's fine because, in the end,
I probably know more than you.

and
To anger some lash out,
To lies some tend to whine.
It doesn't matter what I see;
I'm learning, so I'm fine.

You did a great job with the similes and metaphors. One thing though, there was a couple stanzas that meant the same thing. You should try to avoid that. Other than that, everything was wonderful! I truly enjoyed this poem! Keep writing! :D




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Hey. Very good poem, I love the flow, and the subject. Some of my favorite parts include:

" I have found that the less you say,

The more you tend to learn. "

and " The most valuable thing I learned, however,

Was how and when to be quiet."

I did find some of the poem to be a bit repetitive. Not entirely unpleasant but I still feel you could remove a stanza or two and still retain the full effect of the poem.

Still I enjoyed reading it and it was excellent! Thank you and keep writing!




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This poem is grand! When I first clicked upon it I began to imagine it was much too long, but in truth I believe it is a wonderful length. It fully explains the subject without over or under doing it. Wonderful!
When I first read the title and the description I thought it was your observation of a family meeting, maybe Thanksgiving, that summed up all get-togethers. Now that I realize I was wrong, I find that the contents of this poem is much more fascinating.
It doesn't take a turn for the worse, and it doesn't end in sad oblivion. I really did love this poem. The rhyme was great. There are too many vignettes on here, don't you think?
I also did not see any spelling or grammar errors, but I wasn't looking too hard.
Thank you for a lovely poem.





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