Wow, deep poem! The way I understand it, it's about a ruler who's struggling to rule properly, and just can't watch his empire crumble away, right? So, really nice poem! It's a good representation of the struggle a ruler/king faces. The flow of the poem is smooth and rhythmic, and therefore it was nice to read. Your expression is awfully good. Just work on the punctuation of the poem (You need to add commas before every other line and such) and it'll be even better. Keep it up!
Mysticalxx
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