I would love to talk to all of you humans, but I just don't have that time to waste on something like that. You see, I am not lucky as you. All of you are humans and I ended up not being one. Creepy huh? Well I guess you will have to deal with it beacuse I am not telling you what I am and how in the world I found out about it. Oh okay, I'll tell you, but you are not to interrupt or you will never hear the end of the story.
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I'm sorry to disappoint any of you, but I have decided to abandon this writing. Its not that good anyways.
Hmmm. This does sound like it will be an interesting novel but I agree that the introduction is unnecessary. Yes, it intrigues me and makes me want to read more but it's too short to be a prologue, on the verge of cliché and would perhaps work best on the back of a book? Yes, I think this would be great to go on the back of the book if it was expanded a little but why not start the story now and then I shall be able to give you a proper critique =)
These kinds of introductions have quickly become nothing short of a cliche. Just butcher this and begin your story straight away, because believe it or not, the plot makes me want to read the rest- not some low-register, chatty introduction!
Good luck, ill gladly read your actual story though.
what do you mean uh what...what I wrote was kind of like an intro!
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