Like petals in the wind

LOVED IT. And the image of the petals in the wind, SO BEAUTIFUL.

Love it. And I haven't met you, but I love you too.

Only joking!

Christina!!

My God.


This. Is. Freaking. Amazing.

Girl, just go look at Vat's post. It says it all.

Hey, Mikster!

This is definitely a beautifully-done piece of work. You should certainly be proud of it! And you're totes right -- those third and fourth verses are really awesome. I definitely liked those. Overall, the flow was very well done and the imagery was just astounding.

If I were to pick out anything, I'd probably mention the first and second verses felt a little weird to me. The flow got a bit choppy, especially in the second verse. The picture itself seemed a bit weird to me. Crawling into a den of sins, if you will, to see something radiant -- and that something not being treated well. At least, that's the impression I got, which seemed a little weird to me.

But I honestly don't have much else to pick at. It's all so very beautiful. I wish I could be of more use! I really love how the song ended, a drawback to the chorus. Lovely chorus, by the way.

Thanks for letting me know about this. It's a wonderful piece! Fantastic job.

Keep writing!

Jabber, the One and Only!

I loved this one. Definitely would enjoy to hear this in song. So many metaphors but understood completely what it was about.


Far beyond erupting volcanoes,
across seas of wrath and war,
you can hear his silent echoes –
words you don’t know anymore.


That was my favorite, flowed so great, and i can vividly picture it in my head.
I see great potential, good luck!