This is beautiful.
I understood what this song was about when I sat and thought about Syria and what that entailed. (I'm a bit slow. xD)
But yeah. This was awesome. I have little critique to make. It's one of your best works, I think. You have some really awesome moments, and just the structure of the song is beautiful. The metaphors fit perfectly, and just. It's awesome.
The only comment I might make is that the beginning doesn't seem to tie in with the end. Maybe mention the sun or perhaps a nighttime reference in the beginning. I think the sun bit in the last verse is awesome, so if there's a way to do something similar to tie the two together, that might be cool. It's really just a suggestion, though!
Well done!
Keep writing!
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