The little green men are everywhere
They inhabit the pores of a sponge
I scrub my head; I scrub my toes
There is no escaping this grunge!
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The little green men are everywhere
I shield my face with a mask
I clean all day; I clean all night
The doorknobs are quite the task!
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The little green men are everywhere
I hide myself in my room
Feet in boxes; nets over bed
I shall not meet my doom!
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The little green men are everywhere
They multiply more and more
Feed me crèpes; feed me pizza
It’s all that fits under the door!
Very nice. My favourite lines are the last two being that they made me laugh. The repitition of "little green men" was a nice touch to each stanza and good to amplfy the germophobes illness. However in using "little greeen men" i kept picturing little aliens instead of germs. I suggest expanding the poem and putting the narrator in a germy hostpial just for giggles.
This is really very humorous!
I've read a few other poems of yours, and I find them all amusing. I must say, you have real talent.
The ABCB pattern of rhyme is a nice touch. It makes it even sillier.
Another fine element of this poem is how you start each stanza with " The little green men are everywhere,". Out of context, it wouldn't have made much sense, but it does, because of the wonderful title you have.
There isn't much else I have to say about this poem. There was nothing I disliked. Nice Job!
Thank you.
Thewriter13 to give you a short review.
(am I the only one that understood:
XDFeed me crèpes; feed me pizza
It’s all that fits under the door!
I scrub my head; I scrub my toes
) 
Hi.
I enjoy reading your works. And this is another to add to the list. XD
It's an interesting topic to choose to write about.
My favourite is this line:
You have a great -although quite unique-style of humour, but I feel like I understand and click with it and that helps when reading your works.There is no escaping this grunge!
Interesting choice. XD I wonder if you wrote this when you were hungry?!Feed me crèpes; feed me pizza
Hello.
Kanome here with a review for you.
I love the poem honestly.
It shows how some people are actual cleaner than others, and that they care about their health more than others.
Nitpicks:
- Okay, this line, I think, is irrelevant to this piece. It's probably just me, but can you explain this to me in a way that I can understand?
Feed me crèpes; feed me pizza
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