Hi there! Scarlet here to review!
I wasn't really laughing at first but when it got too the 3rd paragraph I found it really funny.
The third sentenced grossed me out a bit, I cringed. That's good though, I did enjoy the poem and I found it humorous and Interesting also Unique and Different.
You did a decent job on this and if I had to rate it from 1-10.
You'd get about a 7 1/2
It wasn't too bad, though I wished I could've read more, but overall I enjoyed it and it was funny. Now I'll go over my impression of this.
His slime is crusty, corpulent with goo.
He’s a glutton who gorges on rancid stew.
Fingernails and boogers that slip down the drain,
Become one with his flesh; his life is arcane.
(In my head this tells me he's disgusting and villainess, and potentially evil. I like the words used to describe the demon very vivid.)
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A basilisk who bathes in the sludge of the sewer,
His odor malevolent: the stench of manure.
The demon doth possess your kitchen sink,
His belching bulk besmirching your drink.
(This I feel stresses about the creatures being, again very good figurative language.)
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Call forth the plumber; the exorcist of pipe,
To banish this devil of grit and of tripe.
T’way! T’way! from the creature’s jowls,
The exorcist doth enter it’s stinking bowels.
(I found this part funny especially 'Call forth the plumber; the exorcist of pipe')
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Flee from your township; escape the drudge,
Never return to the Demon of Sludge.
(It reveals what exactly the creature is the ending is well thought-out.)
This has earned you a like and a follow. One of the best poems I've read all day. I like how professional and experienced this poem is. Really nice!
Sincerely, @ScarletDreams14; Member of Salsa Verde
Writer, Artist, Student and Reader
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