Young Writers Society

wow! this was a great poem! I really love the rhythm it has to it. it was just such an amazing poem all around!

hey @LizzyTyler here is a quick review

so we going to get started on your poem!

First this poem called Scars was actually impressive this was a awesome poem i ever read and i also have a good line to show you and i be keep reading it and reading it My scars make me solid,

My scars make me strong,

A composition of stories,

A composition of songs,

My compliment is you did an incredible job with this poem but you needed like a stanza on the third line through that's what i i'm seeing like it was suppose to be a stanza on the third line

How you could of improve is start checking on your work look what you see that is missing or something before you post your poems cause some people be forgetting there stanzas on there poems a lot

Keep Writing @LizzyTyler!!

~Jay

Hi LizzyTyler,

Mailice here with a quick review!

Your poem turned out very well overall. I like how it sounds when you read it and how well the rhymes correlate with each other. I also like the "simplicity" of the symbolism here and that you can read into it quickly and still walk out with a little shiver.

Two points that particularly caught my eye:

Were made by family
And people called kin,

Each scar tells a story,
One I'll never forget.

This poem is a really good one. I love how you show that though these scars hurt, and were caused by very unpleasant means, they strengthen us and remind us of memories. This reminds me of a few lines from books and quotes like:

'Scars are the marks of a warrior' (or something like that, I don't remember exactly)
'What doesn't kill you, makes you stronger'
'The stronger the wind, the stronger the trees'
'The hottest fires forge the strongest steel'
And I could go on and on...

Anyway, I just have one thing to correct.

In the third line, first stanza,

'We’re made by family'

I think you meant 'Were' made by family. Maybe I got the meaning wrong, but just check that.

Anyway, the poem is awesome!

THIS IS AMAZING!! So imma review it


"These scars on my heart

My soul and my skin,

We’re made by family

And people called kin"


So this gives a lot of background here, which I like very much! It's great. I love how you introduced the scars and how they are invisible due to almost being the faults in your mental health. It's nice and visual however uses a bit of thought to create the picture.


"My scars make me solid,

My scars make me strong,"


I love how you start to build the positivity up in the poem...it makes a great effect and almost recaps your journey through these hard times (if that makes sense!) and the increase in recovery since the scars were formed.


"Through the sting of betrayal,

Through the pain of regret,

Each scar tells a story,

One I’ll never forget."


This stanza has to be my favourite. It proves that you are really telling the story of how these scars and damage was done in the 1st place. It is an awesome bit. It really shows how much the feelings and emotions stay with you, even after the destruction has been over with. You can feel a slightly less panicking version of the scenes and episodes you had to go through. It sticks with you, and you show it in a beautiful way through this piece of great writing.

Have a great day and carry on writing. You have a talent for this! It can take you far in life to simply have good word choice and grammar!
Stay safe,
Love Rubes x

Hello there!

These scars on my heart

My soul and my skin,

We’re made by family

And people called kin,

My scars make me solid,

My scars make me strong

A composition of stories,

A composition of songs,

Each scar tells a story,

One I’ll never forget.

This definitely relates to me and you did an amazing job.