Hi there! I'm here to drop a quick review.
This poem hit me hard. I have to say, you have the gift of connecting directly with your readers. All your writing is just soo relatable.
The beginning is very apt. I perfectly get what you are saying, that it strikes only when you are alone. It's easy to hide and ignore the insecurity.
It's funny, I just recently posted a poem about finding the best in us and holding on to that when we feel 'inept'. You can check it out here.
The second stanza expresses how this self-doubt doesn't come from somewhere outside, it's inside our minds. 'Self-inflicted doubts' perfectly encapsulates that.
The third is, I think, the stanza that connects most with the readers. 'Am I enough?' that is such a perfect expression of what we feel.
In the fourth, 'seeds of painful past' is a great expression, it shows that if tended to, these might grow into larger insecurities.
In the fifth stanza, 'Covering my thoughts with negative space;' didn't make much sense to me. I got the gist of your statement, but you could consider reframing that.
The 6th, 'putting a smile across my face, hiding the painful thoughts in silence.' shows how we 'wear the mask' of happiness, wishing that the self-doubt would go away if we hid it.
I think the redundancy of 'no, no, no,' in the 7th stanza was the best part of it. It brings that connection with the reader, without which, it would sound very office-like and formal.
The last stanza really concluded it well. Somehow, to me, it felt like the flow itself was disrupted, which is perfect for this ending.
Overall, this was a great poem. Despite the uneven rhyme scheme, the flow was very smooth. Amazing job!
Keep Writing!
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