Blood Heist

I thoroughly enjoyed reading this poem! How can one not when it's relatable. The following lines are the ones I liked the most:

"Slapping one to death never stops the brawl
for there comes it's brothers for another war."

A great sense of humor and a very balanced piece of work you have put into words. Keep writing!

Best wishes,
I

Hi Hkumar,

I thought I would stop by and leave a small review for you.

I thoroughly enjoyed this poem and think the message is very well delivered. One thing I noticed is the flow of the poem lacks cohesion and consistency. At the beginning there is a lack of syllabic patterns and it makes the poem hard to read to begin with. However, once you get to "Sucking every bare skin that they find

whispering to me of their line behind" the pattern begins and it makes the reading of the poem so much easier and that much more mesmerising! Possibly look at how the poem reads when you say it out loud before completing it.

I look forward to reading more of your work in the future.

-Delirium Nervosa

Hi! This is a great piece of work and so relatable. Last line of the poem just stands out.I can't stop reading that again and again.
Even,In my wildest dreams, I never thought such a poem and that too on mosquitoes can be composed.I really liked it.You have done a great job. The rhyming, the humor, the emotions all are on point.Indeed, this was a great piece of work. Your observation is also great. I felt like I could imagine the whole scenario in front of my eyes.
Lastly, all the best for your future works and Keep writing!
From: Bhavya

Hello! I have come here to review your poem today!

I absolutely love this poem! I love the chaos, emotionally charged language, and all the descriptive verbs and adjectives you used! It's a very well written poem that funny in the fact its describing mosquitoes, which really are creatures from hell in their own way. Its a relatable but surprisingly detailed and very entertaining and humorous to read. It describes the bugs as hellish and vampire-like as they try to suck our blood and are relentless in their quest to suck our blood. I love lines like "Neither will I let enemies feast on me" and "Nor will I give up a proper fight", it describes this as a battle of epic proportions against a horde of deadly creatures when in reality it's just some annoying bugs everyone deals with on a daily basis. You did an excellent job of personifying the bugs and describing the hatred that the narrator has towards these pesky things. You have a colorful and bright vocabulary of descriptive words and emotionally charged language in this piece. You did an excellent job on the flow and tone of the poem and you have an amazing writing style! Good job and keep writing!